2012년 3월 18일 일요일
ACTIVITY 7
the best day of my life is the College Scholastic Ability Test day!!
the exam is over
It was extremely excited and fun.
I don't have to go to school anymore in early morning
l don't have to study in school utill late
my family ate out all together
at home, I imagined future
I was unable to sleep because I looked forward to future
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Your basic ideas are great! I see strong support providing reasons why that day was the best! However, the organization and format need some work.
답글삭제Here are some tips to improve:
1. Very important in English: Capitalize the first word of each sentence and end each sentence with a period. Be sure to ask me in person if you don't know what I mean.
2. Don't write a list of sentences. Follow the format of a paragraph. Again, ask if you dont understand.
3. Be more specific. You say, "It was extremely excited and fun." What is "It"? Taking the exam? After the exam? Remember, you should be very direct when writing in English.
You have great content, including your concluding sentence. Let's work on the formatting.
Professor Treeful