I love watching fantasy movies.
Fantasy movies have a variety of attractions that fascinate people.
First, We can experience the world that is nonexistent in a reality as we watch them.
For example, When I saw the movie 'Avatar', I was attracted the world that a Navi tribe live in, and I wanna live in there.
Second, They have fantastic images worth seeing.
Finally, If children see them, they grow an original idea.
So, I love fantasy movies!!!
Great job! You have shown many good elements of writing, for example, using the words "first," "second," and "finally." You have great supporting sentences and giving an example is terrific!
답글삭제Here are a couple tips to improve your writing:
1. Formatting - don't list the sentences one by one. Put it in paragraph format.
2. Don't capitalize the words after "First, Second, For example, Finally." Only capitalize the first word in a sentence. So, "First, we..." etc.